What d'you think about this poem???

On top of Old Smokey


All covered in snow


I shot my old teacher


5 minutes ago





I shot her with pleasure,


I shot her with pride.


I couldn%26#039;t have missed her,


She was 50ft wide.





I went to her funeral,


I went to her grave.


Instead of throwing flowers,


I threw a grenade.

What d%26#039;you think about this poem???
Yours is good but why is there no punctuation in the first verse? Anyway, as I am a fat, ex-teacher I prefer this:





At the front of the classroom,


All covered in chalk,


I smacked one my pupils.


She was such a dork.





I whacked her with pleasure.


I whacked her with pride.


I wouldn%26#039;t have missed her.


Oh my, how she cried.





She told the headmaster.


He shouted at me.


He said %26quot;Well Done there.%26quot;


And we both danced with glee.





Jenn, I hope you take this in the spirit in which it was intended.
Reply:Thank you so much, Jenn. You inspired me. All my best wishes to you and your mate. Report It

Reply:I suppose it%26#039;s funny if your 10
Reply:The original one was better. But not bad you.
Reply:interesting
Reply:Strange but funny
Reply:i wish i could of done this to a couple of tachers lol god I used to hate school
Reply:I think that poem could get your butt thrown in jail these days..curb the creativity, someone will call the FBI
Reply:Excellent but old hat Monty Pythonesque stuff. You should go far. Please do.
Reply:i like the ryhming..but the story is kinda scary and weird....
Reply:Very good lol.
Reply:Very juvenile....
Reply:a bit creepy to be honest.
Reply:If you wrote it, you%26#039;ve got urself a career. I have to show this poem to my friends! This is awesome!
Reply:interesting...is that poem about math teacher???haahhaha!!!!
Reply:um its ish ..
Reply:ye its ok a bit horrible but heywe are in the 21centurie
Reply:So this is how you spend your time. Thank you I enjoyed it.
Reply:did you worte it? if so good
Reply:i loved it
Reply:LOL



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