What do you think of my poem "House of the Dead: My Home Too"?

I looked around


The sky was interesting


The moon was in the white sky and the sun was going down





I looked around


There were comforters and comfortees


I was suppose to be a comforter





I looked around like a tourist


as if the funeral-to-be was a spectacle


I was in my role of observer


and I saw my co-worker’s white face


without makeup was still quite pretty


Did her grief add to or subtract from her beauty?





I saw the mounds of dirt


some with flowers and some without


I tried not to think what it meant


what those mounds of dirt meant





The wife of the dead man fainted


I had been told that she didn’t love her husband


Then I remembered my friend telling me


the dead man took too long to die


the family prayed for his death

What do you think of my poem "House of the Dead: My Home Too"?
That was great...





Very good...I was there...





And your messages and observations "spoke to me..."





I liked it...
Reply:Very good. Hope you write more, you have a talent.
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